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Fordham: Something you are proud of (open)

300 words (you choose 1 of 4 prompts; supplement is optional)

Is there something that you are proud of that you would like to share with the Admission Committee?
What it’s really asking

Share one genuine source of pride the rest of your application would not reveal. This is the open prompt: use it when your best story does not fit the other three. You still write only one of the four, 300 words max.

Why they ask it

Open prompts reward authenticity and self-knowledge. Fordham is checking whether you can choose something meaningful and small rather than impressive and hollow, and whether you understand why it matters to you.

Three ways in
A quiet win

An accomplishment with no trophy attached that still genuinely mattered to you.

Stuck with it

Something you fixed, finished, or kept doing when no one was watching.

Identity you carry

A part of your family or background you protect and want to bring forward.

✕  Weak opening

“I am most proud of being captain of the varsity team and leading us to the championship.”

✓  Strong opening

“I am proud that my grandmother now texts me good morning every day, because I am the one who taught her how.”

✦ Annotated example · The repaired bicycles. Written by EssayLens to teach, not a real applicant’s essay. Tap a highlighted line →
I am proud of forty-one bicycles. That is how many my brother and I have fixed and given away since the spring our father lost his job and we could not afford to replace my flat tire, so I learned to patch it myself from a video.1What started as necessity became a habit, then something closer to a calling. People on our block leave broken bikes by the dumpster. We started taking them in, cleaning the chains in our kitchen sink, truing the wheels on a stand my brother welded from scrap.I am proud of the bikes, but I am prouder of what they taught me about quiet usefulness. We do not run a charity with a name. We just know that a working bicycle is sometimes the difference between a person making it to a job interview and not.2The girl two floors down rides hers to her grandmother's nursing home now. The man who does deliveries took the green ten-speed and shook my hand for a long time without saying much.I never told my school about this. There is no club, no award, no line on an application that the bikes belong on, which is partly why I am telling you now. The thing I am proudest of is the thing nobody asked me to do.3I have learned that you can build something real out of other people's discarded things, that repair is its own kind of generosity, and that you do not need permission or a budget to be useful to the people near you. I am bringing the bike stand to college. There will always be a flat tire that needs patching, and I would like to be the person who knows how.4
  1. 1A concrete, surprising opening number anchors the pride in something specific. Fordham rewards care made concrete, and this is care you can count.
  2. 2Shifts from the achievement to the reflection it produced, which is the move that distinguishes a Fordham essay from a resume bullet. The stakes are made human.
  3. 3The admission that this work is invisible and unrewarded signals genuine character over credential-hunting, exactly the humility Jesuit-rooted Fordham looks for.
  4. 4Ends by naming the lasting values and projecting them forward, so the pride becomes a statement of who the applicant will be on campus rather than a closed story.
Stuck? Start here
  • What am I quietly proud of that no resume line would show?
  • Why does this pride matter to me, beyond the achievement itself?
  • What does this thing reveal about how I treat people or problems?
Before you submit
  • Did I choose something true over something impressive?
  • Is the 'why I am proud' clearer than the 'what happened'?
  • Would this surprise a reader who only saw the rest of my application?

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